lin night

the dialogue is realistic, the situation is realistic, but i get about as much out of reading this as i would watching a lifetime movie of the week.

well there's no joke forum so you might as well post it here, right? i give this joke 7/10. yeah it was pretty easy to get, but i bet none ...

this is awesome. like reading a painting, kind of?

i really like this. i think the unconventional? structure, lack of punctuation, etc lend the poem a sort of honesty. there are no stanzas that i could single out as ...

This is a bunch of navel-gazing that goes nowhere fast. but that's what i wanted...

i must have read that last stanza like ten times. this one's a keeper.

i don't think the emphasis on dialogue works much in any capacity. this reads like a script for a recent brand of horror movie that'll hopefully fade out in coming ...

The fumes might be getting to me, but isn't that a hole in the sky? Love this.

thank you for the input. this was more an attempt to capture an emotional state than create a coherent plot with characters, conflict, etc.

there are some really pretty things here. wording is perfect in places. i hope more people read this and appreciate this.

there's no more.

the right words, the right level of mystery. i think we have all the information we need. good job.

i read these words and i think why bother i'll never be able to write something that aches and hurts as much as this. you have a singular talent. don't ...

a near-brilliant portrait of heartbreak. maybe the phone metaphor could be toned down a notch but i really love and understand what you're saying.

this is both angry and imperfect but the little imperfections here (spelling, grammar) can be forgiven in the face of such honest emotions. good job!